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**The Good, the Bad, and the Destruction** Excellent title, very catchy! Bomb manufacturing shouldn’t be happening because firstly, it is really dangerous, and secondly it is just plain wrong. You don’t want to live in a war encouraged country, would you? One minute you would be safe, the next your city would be in ruins. It would also release radiation, which is bad for your health. Would you like your brain to melt!? Love the rhetorical questions-getting the reader thinking. Well done Gabrielle! But people believe this is a good idea, they think they can win any war. The truth is, there is no war going on, if there will be another, I don’t know, but what I do know is this type of technology is deadly. Not only for now but for the future. It may have ended the war,but it will probably start a new one.

Why must this carry on? The war is over, there is no destiny for these destructive toys anymore. But the danger can still go on. While in the making, the bomb could go off, send radiation across the town, and that would be the end of you! Just imagine all the destruction. It could even be your fault that the world could end 100 times over. Love the term toys, you have thought carefully about what language will carry your viewpoint. But there is a good side to all of this. The Atomic Bomb could be used to defend the country against serious threats, like other countries, meteor crashes and more. It could also help with doing science related projects. But it doesn’t mean this whole idea of the bomb is a good thing, it is still bad in so many ways.

 So you see this has to stop. What happens when other countries get the bomb. It could be the end of the world as we know it. Bombs would be going off here and there, you would see a sky filled with mushroom clouds. So I hope I have made my point, this must end. I feel that you have expressed your viewpoint successfully, you have included great topic based language and your paragraphs are sequenced logically. Well done!

1. What were your expectations of skiing before the trip?
I thought that it was going to be fun once I got the hang of it and that I would fall over heaps.

2. What were your two worst fears, explain and how did you overcome these?
Fear 1: I was going to fall and break something Fear 2: I was going to fall off the ski lift. I overcame these by learning how to stop propably so that I wouldn't hurt myself.

3. What was your greatest achievement?
Being able to ski all the way down without falling over, not even when I came off the ski lift!!

4. What advice would you give someone who is about to ski for the first time? Explain some new techniques I learnt from skiing.
I would tell them not to worry it's really fun and I would tell them how to stop, and how to turn, to turn you put most of your weight onto the side you DON'T want to turn to and you'll go the opposite.

Life isn't fair

Her piercing eyes darted around the woods making sure she was not being followed. The rustling of the leaves made her jump every two seconds, life wasn't fair and she was worried. Her blond, silky hair brushed against a bush, getting caught in the thorns. Why me, she thought, why is it always me? Her heart was beating rapidly, she could hear it over the loud, whistling of the wind. Then she froze, as still as night, she saw a familiar silhouette walking towards her. She couldn't move, her legs were frozen to the ground. "Phoenix, it's ok you' re safe now" it was her grandmother. Phoenix didn't realise she was holding her breath until she sighed a sigh of relief. "How is mother? Is she ok, I'm worried grandma,tell me!" Phoenix was worried, her mother had come down with leukemia two weeks ago, the doctors said she wouldn't recover but to still have hope, but Phoenix didn't believe them, she knew her mother was doomed to fall to the evil of cancer. Her grandmother was silent for a few seconds, but the hesitation told Phoenix enough to know that the news was bad. "Your mother, is.....she's..... she's getting worse," Phoenix felt the warmth of her tears streaming down her cheeks, "It's not fair grandma!! Why does she have to have cancer?" Her grandmother looked thoughtful, "I'm sorry child, life isn't fair, the world works like that, sometimes great things happen to you, other times, luck just doesn't go your way." Phoenix closed her eyes, hoping that when she opened them it would all go away, but when she opened them her grandmother was still there and her mother was still sick. Phoenix just went with her grandmother back home.

Two days later Phoenix's mother died.